The Eight Sentences:
Claudia replied with a note of authority, “Your phone calls put you into the same light as the person who squeezed the trigger. Your finger did the damage before the cross hairs were set and the shooter probably never realized when the round was fired.”

Claudia is a bit older and blonde, although she IS a master of disguise… (I love this image though!)
“You’re into Zen aren’t you? So ‘into the moment’ you don’t realize the target is falling and it’s because of you,”
“Does it bother you so much you want revenge?” Claudia asked.
“I don’t consider solving a problem for the world as being revenge,” answered Star. “How do you view your work?”
“Sometimes I’m not sure if I’m a do-gooder ridding society of undesirables or just a psychopath taking out the trash.”
The Set Up:
Claudia met someone she did not expect to meet (Star Braun.) Their encounter was the subject of a previous Sunday Snippet and can be found HERE. This week’s eight sentences are from the tete a tete the two had after they both survived their initial meeting. Star has just confessed that she had made phone calls to engage Claudia’s services and now has regrets.
NOTE: My confession is….I got that last line, Claudia’s comment about taking out the trash from one of the reviews of my book. It was in the Seattle Post Intelligencer.
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21 responses to “Take out the papers and the trash!”
catherinewinther
October 4th, 2014 at 18:44
Great snippet. Crisp writing and gripping plot. I already have a feel for the characters and the dynamic in one short snippet.
FCEtier
October 4th, 2014 at 20:04
Thanks Catherine. I appreciate hearing from you.
jtsuruoka
October 3rd, 2014 at 18:10
Love this snippet. The dialogue has real snarl. Plus, you put, “Yakkety Yak”, in my head…
Author Charmaine Gordon
September 29th, 2014 at 21:00
Rapid fire dialogue always interests me and between two modern day killers, it’s fascinating. Where oh where does this imagination come from?
emmygatrell
September 29th, 2014 at 06:02
Great snippet! Love that line! What a win!
Teresa Cypher
September 28th, 2014 at 21:18
“Or you don’t get no spending cash… Yakety yak…” Okay, I read the title to your snippet and a song got stuck in my head. 🙂
Good snippet. It’s intriguing. The dialogue between these two is (in my head) spoken with sharp tongues. And I LOVE that last line. I see why you wanted to use it! 🙂
Good 8, Chip. 🙂
FCEtier
September 29th, 2014 at 08:43
Thanks, Teresa.
I almost included the video of that song, but decided it would be too distracting.
I love that song and especially the instrumental by Boots Randolph, “Yakety Sax.”
Charley Descoteaux
September 28th, 2014 at 17:10
I love Claudia 8 sentences at a time–I bet she’s even more fun in long form. I’ll have to work on proving that hypothesis soon… 🙂
FCEtier
September 28th, 2014 at 19:50
Thanks, Charley.
AYWK debuts in Dec. as a twice a week serial. I’ll send you the link when Chapter One goes live.
elainecsc2013
September 28th, 2014 at 15:24
I like that last line. I also like that the two of them are talking.
Botanist
September 28th, 2014 at 14:03
Not sure what the relationship is between these two, but sounds like a nice piece of philosophical introspection. Great last line.
FCEtier
October 4th, 2014 at 20:06
Thank you sir. They aren’t too sure about their relationship yet either.
historysleuth1
September 28th, 2014 at 14:00
Great scene and that line works great!
History Sleuth – Milk Carton Murders
Gem
September 28th, 2014 at 13:39
Psychopath or not, I like her. 😀
Linda Hamonou
September 28th, 2014 at 11:35
I like that image of the psychopath taking out the trash, it’s very powerful, but now aren’t they both the same?
veronicascott
September 28th, 2014 at 11:21
Interesting conversation between two highly intriguing women. What more can anyone ask for? Great snippet!
Cecilia Corona
September 28th, 2014 at 10:47
The the back and forth she is having with herself at the end there.
siobhanmuir
September 28th, 2014 at 09:37
Oh, love the last line and her contemplation, Frank. Nicely done. 🙂
zeldabenjamin
September 28th, 2014 at 09:20
Love a tough heroine who has doubts about what she’s doing.
Sarah W
September 28th, 2014 at 08:36
Maybe she’s a do-gooding psychopath taking out the undesirable trash?
Regardless, she’s Claudia, and that’s enough for me, Chip! 🙂
nancygoldberglevine
September 28th, 2014 at 19:56
Like the snippet, the visual, and the last line.